Horror at Tombstone
In Tombstone, a condemned man's last confession and gritty tale of retribution.
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Available in print:
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on r/writing
Real talk: Your writing feels raw. There's not much structure. There's not really a problem being solved.
The first paragraph is, I'm assuming, a town crier or something addressing the condemned. Then it switches to first person. If you put the first paragraph in quotes it would fix it.
For the most part, you straight up tell the reader what happened, rather than giving us a set of cascading events. You did explain why you set the barn on fire (because you stepped in shit), so that was good.
But!
There are some genuinely solid moments in your writing, in sort of a stream of consciousness / Dostoyevsky sort of way. They felt real, like the narrator was a person with lots of lived-in experiences. He laughs to himself, he feels bitterness, but not about killing people. You mention Sissy. Put her in the crowd. How does the condemned react to that?